The current society has witnessed the development of medical technology and equipment, however also the decrease of people's awareness of daily health. And the question which way is the best health-keeping method is still open to debate. For me, a college student not only under great academic pressure but also having much knowledge of the fierce competition in our society, I'm more willing to change my amount of stress to keep myself mentally healthy, rather than merely caring about the kind of food I eat or the amount of exercise I do. My reasons are as follows.
On the one hand, changing the amount of stress I face is more basic and fundamental in improving my overall health, because under less pressure I'll definitely get more motivated to also make differences in the other two aspects. Just by imagining myself deeply absorbed in all kinds of stress, like the fear of failures, jokes, rumors and other terrible things, I guess I'll definitely be in no good mood for any delicious food or interesting exercise. On the contrary, by decreasing my level of stress and keeping positive looks on life, I'll get more relaxed to consider proper kinds of food and sports to further keep myself physically healthy.
On the other hand, since the number of people dying or getting injured due to mental issues instead of just physical ones is steadily on the increase, I do believe that getting less stress is more urgent and thus important for me than the other two choices. Several scientific researches carried out by professionals have taught us the lesson that people under greater pressure are more likely to put great burden on their hearts and minds, and even accumulate irreversible hurt on these organs. In the short term, this could enhance their risks of getting struck by acute diseases; in the long run, their longevity also shows shrinking trends than other individuals with similar physical index. Even if we could precisely control the exact kinds of food and the proper amount of exercise, all these could only grant some physical stability, while it's actually keeping mental balance and timely getting rid of pressure that account for our strength in dealing with spiritual issues.
In conclusion, I'll choose to care more about stress than food or exercise for my healthy purpose.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, so, still, thus, while, i guess, in conclusion, kind of, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96640826873 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52998364789 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578811369509 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.3481458506 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.166666667 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.25 20.6045352989 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9166666667 5.45110844103 200% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141124406014 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538373971364 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463079568109 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100518259435 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373445260332 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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