If you want to change one aspect to improve your health, which would you choose? Why?
1. The kinds of food you eat
2. The amount of the exercise you do
3. The amount of the stress in your life
It is inevitable that health plays an important role in our daily life and every people hope themselves can have a strong body. Therefore, it raises the question that how can we improve our health. I take the position that by altering the amount of stress in my life is the most effective way.
First, I will reduce the stress in my life because by doing this, I can look at things on the bright side, which can improve my health. On the contrary, if our lives are full of pressure, we will be in bad mood for the whole day. Take myself for example. When I was a freshman, I did not have any friend in the school, which worried me a lot. At that time, I always ate my dinner alone and seldom communicated with others. However, no matter how hard I tried to make friends with others, I still could not blend in with my classmates. That was why I felt stressful at that period and in the various circle, my mental and physical health become worse and worse. Thankfully, my professor noticed my situation and sent me to the class which taught students how to make friends in the group. After the class, I learned a lot of skills and finally find some classmates in common interests, causing all my health problems disappearing in a second.
Furthermore, the reason why we have the stress is that we have too many things to conduct but have little time. And when we want to complete all those things, our health will decrease. However, it is conceivable that not everything is important to us. If we can focus on really essential things, then we can reduce the pressure and improve our health. Take my father for example. When I was young, my father in order to take care of the family, he not only worked until midnight on weekdays to earn more money but also bring us to play at weekend. For years and years exhausting, he was sick. And the doctor told him that human was not the robot and could not do too many things at the same time. Hence, my father decided to only concentrate on his family now, which deduces his stress significantly and recover the health.
Many people may argue that the food and the exercise are also important factors to the health. Nevertheless, I insist that the stress is the main factor because by reducing stress, we can also increase our mental health. In contrast, if we only change the food we eat or just enhance the time we work out, it only can affect the physical health.
In conclusion, I hold the belief that changing the amount of stress in my life can improve my health because it not only can help me become the optimistic person but also can change my lifestyle.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 302, Rule ID: CONFUSION_OF_OUR_OUT
Message: Did you mean 'our'?
...we eat or just enhance the time we work out, it only can affect the physical health...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, really, second, so, still, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44698544699 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39034614544 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474012474012 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6645131068 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.56 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.24 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125106103966 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389610693823 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368942394714 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0903558129144 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221254912778 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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