Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal finance support.
It is an obvious fact that colleges and universities do have a prominent role in every aspect of students' lives. When it comes to allocating money for financial support of activities like sports and social events, some people believe the role of such activities pales in comparison to the significance of libraries and class. On the other hand, others hold the view that there is no doubt that both aspects should receive equal attention. As far as I am concerned, social activities and sports are as important as facilities loke libraries and classes. I will elaborate on my reasons through the following paragraphs.
To start with, it is essential to barry in mind that students need to spend some time off, and do other activities to decrease their stress level causing by the pressure of studying. By being invovled in some sport team like soccur for example, they will do phisical activities. It is a generally accepted fact that doing exercise could relieve mental stress. Additionally, it will lead students to live a healthy lifestyle, and be able to deal with hours of just sitting on a chair and study. Relevant statistics argue that students who are a part of a sports team, do achieve higher marks in their exams. A recent study in Germany has been conducted, and two groups of students were examined for this study. The first group did not any kind of exercises and just spent their time in the library all the semester. On the other hand, the second group was participating in the gym regularly. By the end of the year, the latter group got 34% less reduction in their stress level, and higher scores in final exams. This fact might reinforce the idea that universities and colleges should consider developing facilities like gyms and game areas as well as classrooms and libraries.
Another key thing that should be mentioned is that students should nurture their social skills as well. To be only focused on intellectual nourishment will be harmful to their social abilities. Students spend most of their time in the college or university, so they will need to be engaged in social activities such as going to parties, attending a music concert, getting to know each other. As a case in point, consider personal experience as an example: when I was a freshman in university, our social community demanded the board to build a hall for weekend parties, because many students did not have the time to go out or go back their home town to be in touch with others. The hall was built by the end of the year and all students were happy about that knowing there will be more gathering in the future. Had the university not agreed with the students’ request, and allocated money to support the project, many of them would have been felt secluded.
To make a long story short, I cannot agree more with the idea that sports and social activities should receive equal financial support as well as study facilities. From my point of view, students not only need to deal with physical and social activities to release their stress level, but also will develop their social skills by having the opportunity to use such facilities. Therefore, it is cardinal for colleges and universities to distribute financial resources to support both extra-curriculum programs and study ones.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, kind of, no doubt, such as, as well as, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2730.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 563.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84902309059 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67423251592 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488454706927 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 848.7 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.430626819 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.75 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4583333333 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243585877577 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708878695834 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670122489346 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177699193411 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815066149362 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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