Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

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Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Without any shadow of doubt, media like movies and television play a prominent role in every individual’s life. They affect people’s lives via the kind of content they are providing. Although some people might believe that movies and television have a negative influence on young people behavior, others possess the conviction that such phenomena are not appropriate for young people behavior. As far as I am concerned, television and movies have characteristics which cause more undesirable effects on human behavior, especially for young people. I will elaborate on my reasons through the following paragraphs.
First of all, one should take into account that movie subjects and television programs are produced to entertain people. So, all their contents are not necessarily suitable for young people, who are in a critical period of their lives. Some themes and subjects provide non-educational content, even some of them are harmful to teenagers’ minds, and will lead them to act in a bad way. For instance, some TV series consists of violent stories, drugs, radical behavior, etc. A recent study in Germany asserts that different kinds of movies have a direct effect on teenagers’ behavior. During a four-year psychological study, two groups of students in a high school were examined: the first group was exposed to movies for entertainment more than educational programs. The latter group, in contrast, was dealing with educational contents and TV programs. The analysis of the results of the study showed that students behavior had significant differences. Their way of speaking, the style of wearing clothes, even their decision-making process were not comparable. The first group preferred to have fun, spend times with their friends, eat fast food, and consider studying their lessons as a negative activity. The second group was more into participating in school’s clubs, spend more time in the library searching for new things they were learning from TV programs, and planning their future of career and study.
The second reason I would like to mention is that most movies and TV programs do not represent the reality of life. By watching those programs, most of the people feel dissatisfied with their lives. They not only find their current lives boring, but also disappointed that they are not making any progress in their lives. Take a personal experience as an example: back to the time that I started high school, I was obsessed with a new TV series named Hanna Montana. The leading character of the story was a beautiful young girl who everybody liked her, and she could achieve whatever she wanted very quickly. I could not understand why my life was not like that. After conferring with my father, I decided to cut off watching it, and after a while, I felt better about myself.
To bring everything to a conclusion, I do believe that movies and TV series have a bad influence on young people behavior because of the inappropriate content they provide, and the way people will feel about themselves. I recommend to parents who have young children be more careful about what their children are watching and learning these days.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...of the results of the study showed that students behavior had significant differences. T...
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...ing their future of career and study. The second reason I would like to mention i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, even so, for instance, in contrast, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2664.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15280464217 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8769912006 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520309477756 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 814.5 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1851085445 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.56 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.68 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254683961757 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633507742966 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782735677124 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174980929227 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103889039123 0.0645574589148 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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