Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Young people's life today are occupied with work, study and relationships. Any teen or twenty year-old on the street are busy with jobs, courses to take and puzzled by complicated relationships. Therefore, to my view, organizational skills play a pivotal role for young adults to achieve a balance of life.
First of all, ability to arrange everything is required in work and study. While it is undeniable that the advent of technology has offered humans a great deal of convenience, it has also made work more demanding than ever. As people are assisted with advantageous technical tools and softwares, they are expected to perform with highest productivity. Employees are assigned with a plethora of tasks and asked to complete in a short period of time with high precision. As a result, young people need to excel at making schedule for everything to meet the deadline. Even college students lead the similar hectic life. Since they finish undergraduate programs by credits and choose courses to register themselves, it is necessary for them to plan their own timetable to avoid any conflict of classes' time and club or campus activities. In most classes, students are required to conduct projects with other partners, which all have different schedules. The most stressful time is preparation period for mid term or end term exam with all tests may take place in one or two weeks. Some even have part time jobs, which make it even harder. Without excellent organizational skills, they can hardly survive the university life.
Besides, organizational capability is important for young people to maintain social relationships. In addition to such complex work and study life, young people also need to keep and cement their relationship with family, friends, and other acquaintances. Social network is nowadays as essential as academic knowledge to guarantee people a bright future. The key to fostering a bond with others is obviously by communication, for example, talking, hanging out and eating together. All of these activities requires investment of time. Consequently, the significance of being able to arrange everything, to be specific, appointments, is quite apparent. Without this ability, people are likely to be carried away with their occupations and totally forget about social life. For example, when I was in my freshman and junior year, I was busy with my study and part time job that I did not contact any of my high school friends. But in my senior year, I encountered some trouble and needed help from one of my old friends. It was really difficult and awkward for me to ask her because we have not met or talk to each other for a long time. After that, I realized the importance of maintaining social relationship and learn to arrange my time to keep contact with every one.
In conclusion, I think that being capable of planning everything is important for young people in modern world. In my opinion, they need to improve this skills so that they can balance between work-study and social life, and succeed in every aspect of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: with the highest
...softwares, they are expected to perform with highest productivity. Employees are assigned wi...
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Suggestion: period
... tasks and asked to complete in a short period of time with high precision. As a result, young...
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Suggestion: part-time
...ace in one or two weeks. Some even have part time jobs, which make it even harder. Withou...
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Suggestion:
...can hardly survive the university life. Besides, organizational capability is im...
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Suggestion: part-time
...nior year, I was busy with my study and part time job that I did not contact any of my hi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, if, may, really, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2558.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03543307087 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86161438312 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537401574803 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 806.4 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9638261036 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7407407407 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8148148148 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2962962963 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245443367179 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679955056765 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513101599116 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159127676078 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00655292903721 0.0645574589148 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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