Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
The advent of Internet and other technologies has allowed people to gain access to more information than ever. Watching TV or surfing the Internet for half an hour, people can know all events that are taking place on the globe. However, some doubt that whether such knowledge should be value, as they may not have any impact in our life everyday. On the contrary, I am of the opinion that it is essential to be aware of things eventuating around the world.
First of all, knowing about other events outside your country, even from faraway ones more knowledge is beneficial as it increases one's knowledge. Reading or watching world news obviously provide viewers with more information about the conditions of all other countries. As a result, they can be more considerate when talking to foreigners and avoid offending them because of accidentally mentioning some problems. Moreover, as they have broad knowledge and insight of happenings of other nations, they are more likely to be nominated for positions to work and cooperate with other foreign corporations, therefore, having more promotion chances and earning a higher salary. An illustration is my friend, who rarely read news. However, she once met a Korean and began talking with them. She accidentally mention things related some current conflicts between Korea and China without knowing and frustrated the Korean friend. Fortunately, she quickly realized the strange reaction, found out the problem and apologized. But she still regretted and wished she had been more conscious of news and able not to make that stupid mistake.
In addition, such news helps readers to prepare for unexpected events or phenomena in the future. Although things eventuating outside the country might not have any direct influence in their daily, knowing about them allows people to prevent or quickly come with solutions when encountering similar problems in the future. An instance is in the international news section of an online newspapers I follow, a main article about the event is usually followed by helpful related articles about how to avoid that problem. For example, when I read news about sudden earthquakes in Japan, I also know about how to react when it appears. Although there are small chances of earthquake in my country, it is better to be prepared for such occasions since I am not one hundred percent certain that they will never happen. All in all, knowledge of any event is useful in some way or another.
In conclusion, to my view, it is pivotal for humans to be conscious of happenings in other nations, no matter how unrelated it seems to them. I believe that people should try to read or watch more news about events that occur around the world to take the most advantages of them
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'valued'?
Suggestion: valued
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Line 1, column 338, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...hey may not have any impact in our life everyday. On the contrary, I am of the opinion t...
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Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...knowledge is beneficial as it increases ones knowledge. Reading or watching world ne...
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Line 3, column 804, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'mentions'.
Suggestion: mentions
...gan talking with them. She accidentally mention things related some current conflicts b...
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Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'newspaper'?
Suggestion: newspaper
...international news section of an online newspapers I follow, a main article about the even...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99782608696 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65421428999 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523913043478 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7111839937 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.476190476 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9047619048 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.19047619048 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187056676687 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532657707196 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03886648638 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115273519351 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236320221603 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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