o you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Asking any young adult on the street about their opinion on movies and television, most will answer in favor of these entertainment media. It is undeniable that they have a considerable impact on young people's behavior in today's world. However, whether this influence is favorable or harmful is still in question. To my view, movies and televisions have distorted the way young adults behave for the following reasons.
First and foremost, movies and television lead to unrealistic expectations and cause young people to conduct behavior different from the normal accepted ones. All events in movies and films happen in accordance with the subjectivity and the will of people, who are usually scriptwriters or directors. However, this does not work in the real world. In reality, many things eventuate in a different way and depend on numerous factor that cannot be controlled by humans. Those who are seriously immersed in watching films and movies might fail to realize this and act oddly. Unfortunately, reality is not their favorite movie world and therefore their consequences is worse than . For example, some might expect to safely jump from the roof of one skyscraper to another like his favorite movie character without being aware that this act was done by professionals with assistance from specialized equipments
In addition, these media results in a sedentary and hence, unhealthy lifestyle. Since television programs are more and more appealing, people tend to stick to blue screen all days instead of spending time on outdoor activities like playing sports or camping. The effects of movies is similar. Movies is nowadays a pivotal part of the young's culture that cinemas is the most destination for hanging out. Obviously, all what people during such date is to go the cinema, get into a dark room and sit on chair for a few hours seeing the movie while eating popcorn and drinking cola. Meanwhile, they should choose more active and healthy activities such as playing sports or at least walking around in the parks to enjoy the fresh air
Opponents of this view may claim that movies and television are beneficial because they educate young people. Many of films or movies are based on historical facts or filmed at different countries so that they reveal viewers about history, geography and people in different nations. This can be valid to some extent. Nonetheless, they fail to understand that only parts of movies and films are only based on facts and the rest are pure fiction since many information are distorted for the purpose of the story. If people speak based on the knowledge from the movie or film they watch, it would make them become a fool in front of every one.
In conclusion, movies and television have negatively affected the way young people act. Although these media are attractive, young people should restrain from them and participate in other useful activities such as playing outside or reading books
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, while, at least, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2471.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07392197125 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63742723248 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546201232033 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1274908137 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.318181818 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1363636364 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255474523923 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818785511785 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824519785117 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149201670038 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447938509738 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.