Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The advent of technology advancement has made the world drastically transform in such a short period of time. While the benefits that this change offered are undeniable, some people asserts that they are leading a less joyous and satisfactory than in the past. I agree with opinion because of two reasons.
First of all, consumption trend with higher quality products more and more frequently introduced on the market has reduced people's life satisfaction. Technological development has constantly provided with better and newer products at a faster pace than ever and those who fail to purchase a the latest one will feel depressed. In the twentieth century, the gap between different groundbreaking innovation was a couple of ten years. A decade before, it would take a few years from the release of first Iphone and Samsung Galaxy S and Note to the second generation. Nowadays, these flagship products are renewed annually. Other smartphones for low and middle-income people are updated even more frequently, about every a few months. Every time a new smart phone or smart watch is introduced, people are urged to purchase them and catch the new trend. Unfortunately, the majority cannot keep up with such fast rate of technological progress and afford those devices. This consumption trend prevents people from being contented with their possessions and leads to an insatiable demand for newest products.
Furthermore, people are not only exasperated by their material life but also by their spiritual life. Busy life makes it harder to arrange a meeting with friend and family members. For example, I have not met my group of high school friends for years even when we have agreed on a date a few times. There was always some one, who cancelled in the last day or minute because of some emergency. In addition, most young adults in today's world live independently from their families because of their careers. Obviously, they have to cope with a lot of stress, which is caused by not only work but also the loneliness. An illustration is my friend, who is working in another city faraway from our hometown and can only come back a few times annually. She has been complaining a lot about the strain she feels due to her solitude. It is obvious that people's mental health these days are not as healthy as those living decades ago.
In conclusion, people nowadays are less pleased with their lives than those in the past because they are suffering from materialism and a decline in relationships with others. I believe that both government and citizens should realize these problems and figure out some ways to address them so that human's life could be more fulfilling.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...d drastically transform in such a short period of time. While the benefits that this change of...
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Line 3, column 290, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
...han ever and those who fail to purchase a the latest one will feel depressed. In the ...
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Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...on a date a few times. There was always some one, who cancelled in the last day or minut...
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Line 7, column 300, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...e out some ways to address them so that humans life could be more fulfilling.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98660714286 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74808244254 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591517857143 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.162200907 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1304347826 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4782608696 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65217391304 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234237230652 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629293889622 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646603104251 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159934531325 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371873887878 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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