Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education's ultimate goal is to provide fundamental knowledge and information to all generation who seeking to be an important and effective member in the society. It contains vission, mission, and perfect thinking (outside- the-box)to the person who will be lucky to gets his desire learning. Some people, feels that education easier tasks in today past because the advent of technology makes the gomework to be done much faster and easier than in the past.While others believe the education message is harder to deliver to the new generation due to their neglection of doing homework and spend the spare time watching entertainmnet. I n this essay, I will put forward a substantiated personla view that argues theprocess od education is harder and more suphisticated than in the past for several reasons.
To commence with, the young people today have more freedom in doing things they like to do than before. Today, the rule is less strict than before. Morover, the teacher give them more comfortable scheduale to do their homework and deliver at the time they can fifnsh it. For instance, my son, eleven years old, should submite his project to the teacher within one week. He spends the whole week playing his favourable video game with his friends in the school. Furthermore, the school closed due to weather climate for three continuous days, In turn, he gets extra time to play during days. When thew due day for his his project has to be delivered, he was not finish it. As well as all his peers.The teacher expand the due day three more days. because 605 of the students did not finish it. In this case, the teacher has failed to put her strict roles to te students to follow, especially it is for their own benefit to do the homework.
The second point to be mentioned is that the company who invent these games, always use to make continuous series of the playing charectors, chang strategy within the game, and even buying belongs to the story of the gane. These company inorder to increase their finance, they make the children addict to these programes and consequently, this effect their education level dramatically.
To sum up, while some people thinks the education process is more complex in the past. Personally i believe it is complicated in the current time because of the uneffective and simple rules by the teachers and the company who use to invent new and esciting games which hard to yung people quit easily.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, if, second, so, well, while, as to, for instance, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85851318945 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56564242121 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549160671463 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.3514107012 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.555555556 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189821547541 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575096467241 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519902858031 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10216970347 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412278621797 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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