We have listened it from teachers and parents: the techonolgy is changing the way our kids behave. They do not seem to pay attention to us, neither to listen; they are slaves of pixels and screens. And we usually compare it to when our granparents and parents were kids, life seemed to be easier since they did not have such thing as the internet. And that is why I agree with the prompt that educating children is more difficult task today, and my reasons are as follows.
To begin with, when our parents and grandparents were children they were not exposed to today's technology because it did not even exist. However, this does not mean kids did not have any other type of recreational activities that parents may have thought they would have impacted in a negative way to the education of their kid. But we have to keep in mind that back in the days, the society was also way more conservative and the educational system inside the houses or inside the classroom was stricter, like for example hitting kid's arms with a rule if they misbehavied.
In addition it is extremely easy for a kid to get attached to a cell phone or online gaming when most of their spare time is abused by using this type of technologies. Last year I worked as a nanny and I appareciated cases where parents prefered having their kids inside the house stuck in the tablet screen so they could complete another tasks; and this was a routine. It was frustrating and complicated for parents, and for me at the moment, to make the kids listen to us because they were used to have all their concentration on the device they were using.
Lastly while conected to the web, kids are highly exposed to tons of harmful unfiltered information, and this can be incredible dangerous. They are in a click of distance from perverted data and moreover users whom their work is to play with kids minds to make them do things againts their will, creating a huge psychological impact on children that may cause harsh behavioral consequences in the future. There are plenty of cases related to cyber crimes where this happened, one of them is the famous "Blue Whale" game that made kids to harm themselves under threads against them and their families, without parents knowing what was happening.
In summary, technology is taking huge steps every day and it is our work to know how to manipulate and regulate it in our lifes, and the lifes of our families; specially when it comes to the integral development of a kid. It is a necessity for parents to create rules inside the house so this objects cannot create a negative impact in their children, because cell phones and games online will always be there, but it is in ourselves to understand that the use we give to them comes with tons of responsability as well.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 281, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...y have thought they would have impacted in a negative way to the education of their kid. But we h...
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Line 7, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...ith a rule if they misbehavied. In addition it is extremely easy for a kid to get a...
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Line 7, column 493, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to having'.
Suggestion: used to having
...the kids listen to us because they were used to have all their concentration on the device t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in summary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2310.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65725806452 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57317151168 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.5593448214 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.0 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0666666667 20.6045352989 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134220503047 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567450672178 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705092543047 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0814715818142 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279795792346 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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