Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.?
hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.?
Speaking of a word “Success in a Job”. It arouses different responses among people. Some may frown up it other might nod their heads on it with a wholehearted smile on their faces. As, far as I am concerned, I adopt a firm position that the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school to illustrate that idea, let’s consider the following examples.
First of all, it’s important to consider that almost every person in this world needs success. To achieve our goals we really need to work hard, but along with hard work communication skills also matter a lot because practical life is different than what shown us in books. Like, I remember when I was doing my Bachelors from the University of Kansas city, Missouri. We have a student who was a gold medalist and in fact, he got distinction in every subject. But, he was so socially isolated that he did not want to interact with any classmates. When we graduated during our convocation, he was appraised by all of our professors due to his great academic career and achievements, in fact, three of our professor gave him the letter of recommendation for the job on wall street journal. Eventually, when he went for a job interview. His intercommunication skills were so bad that he was unable to face the panel, and because of that, he had to face unemployment for the whole 6 months regardless of his great academic career.
Secondly, As our world is becoming more and more competitive day by day and the tasks on each person’s shoulders become heavier and heavier. To perform well in this world, we have to be multi-functional rather than book worm. I want to place the example of one of my cousin, who was not good in his studies and in fact he was dropped from the school because of his bad grades. But, he started his work as a freelancer photographer and made some clients, then he started his own studio and now he is one of the renowned photographer in Kansas city and he is considered among one of the richest guy of our immigrant community. We also have the example of BILL GATES from Microsoft who was dropped from his school and now, he is among the world’s richest personalities. So skills also matters a lot along with education.
By the way of conclusion, based on arguments explore above. All in all, I believe that for a success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, in fact, speaking of, by the way, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86354782968 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513333333333 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.533932287 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3181818182 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4545454545 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254326380218 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881028733637 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120199289362 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234874999709 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147469182423 0.0645574589148 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.