Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The development of any country is greatly dependent upon the investment it makes on its citizens. Without a properly funded education system, juveniles may not be able to discover their talents which is, in turn, a missed opportunity for the whole society. While this varies among various countries and is not a trivial issue, In my view, it is incumbent upon governments to put more emphasis on the education of the very young children than on universities' funding. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, children constitute the foundation of the future generation. To be more specific, today's progenies are tomorrow's adults who are going to contribute to the collective efforts of members of the community in order to render a brighter future. As a result of this, the quality of their education can be relatively more significant than the already matured university students. For instance, my cousin who lives in Finland and is nine years old is studying at a primary school there. While Finland might not be the highest ranking country in terms of its universities, it is certainly the world's pioneer in providing quality education for schoolers. As far as I know about my cousin's condition there, one can only be envious of it. Every aspect and detail of teaching process is cared for, resulting in a situation which students studying in there can only thrive. Consequently, young adults who graduate from high schools in such a delicate system, are among the most productive and behaviorally fit individuals.
Secondly, students and schools do not have as many available sources of income as university students or academic institutions have. In other words, they are increasingly vulnerable to any financial hardships that might face them, thus require more assistance from the government. A personal experience of mine is a good example of this. When I was eight years old I got transferred to a public school since my parents could not anymore, afford to send me to a private one. Being a complete stranger in this new environments was challenging for me especially at a time when the school itself was struggling with a massive deficit in its budget. In fact, owing to this destitute situation, they were compelled to sack many of capable instructors we had and even cut the spending on some of the most basic needs of students such as launch programs that were vital for low-income families. No meaningful change happened until the mayor ordered public funding be allocated to the school in order to improve the abysmal conditions there.
In sum, I strongly hold the view that while it might differ in some industrialized nations, it is of greater importance for the governments to financially look after younger children education. Not only are they the future of the country, but also they will be damaged far more than university students if not sufficiently funded for their education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in fact, such as, as a result, in my view, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2474.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99797979798 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86414920675 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 789.3 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.265655765 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.80952381 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.04761904762 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201314143541 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533878524357 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381435112504 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125534525275 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299874755899 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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