Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the contemporary world, education plays a prominent role in every individual's life. In order to have a developed country, governments always allocate budget to education. Although some people might believe that this should be spent on the education of very young children, others possess the conviction that most of the budget should be dedicated to the universities. I personally concur with the first viewpoint. From my perspective, the education of young children is the most consequential principal in a successful country. There are numerous reasons, two of which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
The first noteworthy point supporting my intention, regarding the dedicating a big share of money to the primary education, is that young age is the time that one's personality is being shaped. Therefore, if a country has the purpose of being developed and enhances its people's culture, one of the best means to reach this goal is concentrating on education in primary schools. Attention to the education, as well as improving the auxiliary programs (like music or art classes) can boost the self -reliance of children which helps them to face the problems in their future life and improve their learning. I strongly believe that the better primary education a child has, the better university he can go in his future.
Furthermore, one should not neglect the fact that the level of education in the schools has a direct effect on the level of education in the universities. It is undeniable that the students who had a well good education background can have a much better performance compared to a student with a weak background. For instance, my sister had studied in a well-known school with the most famous teachers. Now, she is the top student in the best university in our country. But her friend who had attended a normal school has many problems in her lessons.
To recapitulate, by spending money on the education of young children, the country can elevate the level of not only the primary schools but also the universities. Primary schools are the best place for teaching cultural matters, like environmental issues, to children. The governments are becoming more aware of the importance of education in young ages, so it is predicted that the more budget will be designated to the education of young children all over the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ucation plays a prominent role in every individuals life. In order to have a developed coun...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0537084399 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9431417875 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50895140665 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5798921806 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.777777778 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7222222222 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05555555556 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238492909869 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696774173148 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565773551539 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147616556484 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810003937973 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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