Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the contemporary world, technology, including computers and cell phones, plays a prominent role in every individual's life. With the spread of social networking and online games, more students have been attracted to use these apparatuses. The inevitable question which has caused heated debates is whether using these devises devices would impact on the education of the children or not. I personally concur with the first viewpoint. From my perspective playing online games or surfing in the social networks directly effects on the students' operation and distract their focus. There are numerous reasons two of which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
The first argument supporting my intention is that although technology can be used as a means of education, most children utilize computers and cell phones to be entertained that would result in drawing their attention away. It is clear that having concentration is one of the most substantial factors in well-educating. Numerous studies have shown that using computers and cell phones directly impacts on the children's sleep, and obviously students who do not have enough sleep hours cannot do well at school.
Furthermore, one should not neglect the fact that social networking and also online games might have a negative effect on children thought and behavior. Social networks usually contain contents that may not be appropriate for a special group of ages. Moreover, there are many action games that have a severe impact on the mentality and morality of the kids. I remember my cousin who was really studious when he was in primary school but after he entered high school, he started using a cell phone to play online games and surf in the social networks. After a while, his function at school declined significantly and at the end, he decided to stop studying.
To recapitulate, the development of technology has two sides, a positive side, and a negative side. One of the harsh consequences of that can be the severe effect of using cell phones and computers, for playing online games and surfing in social networks, on the students. It can have either mentality or morality impact on them and reduce their concentration at school. It is strongly recommended that school managers and advisors find a solution to solve this consequential problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...phones, plays a prominent role in every individuals life. With the spread of social network...
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Line 1, column 536, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...social networks directly effects on the students operation and distract their focus. The...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, really, so, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1954.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18302387268 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8279469863 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533156498674 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7020283734 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.555555556 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9444444444 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05555555556 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158414750572 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485412830615 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444750181374 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0984213551357 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408464646753 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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