Do you agree or disagree that job has a greater effect on your overall happiness than social life?
Since the dawn of civilization, people have sought a better and happier life. There are several factors which can affect someone`s happiness. There is a heated debate among the people about whether a job has more effect on someone`s overall happiness or their social life and activities. I personally believe that social life is more crucial for the happiness of a person. I will elaborate on my point of view through two remarkable reasons.
First of all, humans are inherently tending/ inherently tend to communicate with other people. While developing their relationship with others, they will be able to talk with other people about their problems and also ask for solutions. By speaking to other people, they can relieve their stress, and their friends by solving their problems can bring happiness to their life. To illustrate, when I was a student at the university, I was dealing with some financial difficulties, and that was really bothering me. I had made so many friends there, and when I broached the matter with them, they helped me with all aspects of the problem. One of them stated some points about cost management. Also, another person lent me some money. Therefore, after a while, my problem was totally fixed, and I had a really happy life at that time.
The second reason which comes to mind is that nowadays people have a hectic life. Some of them are struggling for a single job position, and there is really not much to enjoy during working. People need to take some time and relax, and they need something to nourish their minds. By communicating with other people, they can reach this goal. I worked ten hours a day, and when I came home, I was really exhausted. After a while, my friends and I decided to hold some parties to visit each other, and talk. After that, my life has had a dramatic change. During the parties, we enjoy our time together; hence, we forget all of that work stress.
However, jobs can have significant effects on someone`s happiness too, and to be more judicious, some of the points about jobs must be mentioned too. Jobs are the main source of the income of the people, and definitely, the amount of money that someone has can influence their life. And some people who are prosperous in their jobs may have more self-confidence and happier life. But social life is essential in jobs too. People with better communication skills can get along better with other people, so they will be able to be more successful in their jobs, and people with more friends may be more successful in finding jobs since they can ask a lot of people about it.
In the final analysis, I believe that social life has greater effects on someone`s happiness than jobs. It is humans` natural tendency to communicate with other people, and while communicating, people are able to solve their problems. The other reason is that nowadays people have an overwhelming life, and they need something to be apart from their working atmosphere, and the social life is a good option which can help them to stay away from that. However, jobs can have significant effects on someone`s happiness as they are the primary source of income, and they can give self-confidence to the people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 103, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...appiness too, and to be more judicious, some of the points about jobs must be mentioned too...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, while, apart from, as to, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2681.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83063063063 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69509198695 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43963963964 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 837.0 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 17.0 1.86738351254 910% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9733259218 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3666666667 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73333333333 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16561152347 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589546976512 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825765782329 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120327078676 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707032156924 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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