Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
for the successful development of a country it is more important for governments to spend money on education of younger children than spend money on universities
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without the shadow of doubt, education has always played a prominent role in development of countries. By having a glance to well developed countrues like America, it is obvious that at least ninety percent of the society are well educated and comparing it to contries such as Numibia, a poor country, reveals that the education itslef has a huge impact. Some may say that country benefits less from investing money on young childrens than spending money on university but as far as I am concerned childrens are the ones who grow up and form the future of the contry so I am completely agree with that statement. Among myriad reasoning I will delve into most conspcuous ones that convinced me to put forward this idea.
First and foremost, It can elevate the quality of society not only by preventing the formation of delinquents but also by providing a platform for childrens to go after what they like for their future careerer in early ages. As the students are still juvenile forming their behavior is more possible comparing to a person who studies at university. An instance can account for my point. In finland governmet spends a huge proportion of its budget on childrens education and as a result different equipments and apparatuses are at their disposal. Also some one observes the students reactions to these instruments and identify the kid's intrest so from that moment they just treat the kid in order to prepare for his intrest. This way of treating with kids remove hinders in their life and as a result they are more likely to continue their study so the whole society will be more educated. The more literate the individuals, the higher the quality of the society.
Another point one should take for this significant is it can higher the chance of finding jobs when they reach the time to opt a career. This is becaus by the time when they have to choose to whether to continue to study in a unversity or join the working class. This can help a country by providing more work labor. For example I myself kept on studying only to elaborate my chance for finding a preferable position. If I was trained enough to folow the job I liked I might have never joined university and instead might e more prosperous. I wanted to become a car mechanic which never needed to study in a university for it but since I am living in iran I had to continue to study.
To wrap it up, all aforemetioned reasons and examples conviced me that to develop a country government should invest their money for younger students. This can help them to find a job while they are younger and raises the social quality of a company.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, still, well, while, at least, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59720137184 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529032258065 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3010146588 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.210526316 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4736842105 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254792557424 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709491059252 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661024642896 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157698281392 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462730707332 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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