Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In now a days lifestyle, parents are so occupied with their jobs that only a morsel of time is left for them to spend with their childrens. The more they are working, the less time they invest in their familly. As some people may prefer to use their time in order to help kids in their school works others may like to only have fun with them. As long as I am concerned, I prefer to spend my time for entertainment with familly. In the following I will delve into most conspicuous reasons which persuaded me to put forward this idea.
First and foremost, having fun among family members leads to a stronger bond betweem them while asking serious work from kids may affect adversely since only a little time is spent with them. By playing with kids they would understand that the parent cares about them and allocates a part of his/her time in order to make the kid happy. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Wihle I was around eight years both my mother and father used to work hard while I was at school and as a result we had only weekends to ourselves. To refresh the familly my father suggested that we go on hiking during weekends which made me happy a lot since it was my routin to study during school days. By taking us on mountain climbing and hiking, I recognized that I am important for my parents and the care to spend their time with me so it became a habbit and after ten years we still go on hiking for weekends.
Another point one should take to account this significant is it can affect mental health of a kid since kids need to play and participate in group activities. This not only has impact on physical health of the kid but also influences the mental health of them too. While the parents are at work and kids are alone, they usually do solo activities like studying but spending time with a family for entertainment can supply their need of adventures. For example, I had a friend whose name was Billy with a familly thatonly spend their time for works a lot wich in the end led to Billiy's depression. When they visited a doctor to find out about the reason, they explored that their behavior was wrong as if they could find a free time the parents prefered to just help Billy in his study. They did not recohnize that the kid needs a time to play but having known the problem they took a summer off and went on a travel. When they were back Billy had no sign of depression and was a health kid.
To wrap it, all aforementioned reasons and aexamples above, advocates the fact that it is better to play with student instead of just helping them to study. This is because this approach not only creates more healthy kids but also strongers family realationships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
In now a days lifestyle, parents are so occupied with...
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Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
In now a days lifestyle, parents are so occupied with...
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Line 1, column 212, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...less time they invest in their familly. As some people may prefer to use their tim...
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Line 9, column 908, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'travel'.
Suggestion: travel
...blem they took a summer off and went on a travel. When they were back Billy had no sign ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, still, while, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4251497006 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3704357535 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48502994012 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.2729227757 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.85 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.05 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240158543284 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794359922912 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709910008503 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150080251308 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088063473743 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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