Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout recent decades, taking a job is the most important issue for everyone. In this competitive world, although there are numerous opportunity to get a job, there are numerous applicant either and getting a job is harder than before. Whether getting a secure job is better or not some people believe that it is more likely to be safe when we get a secure job but others think that waiting for a better job is much better. In my opinion, taking a secure job would be better for two important reasons.
On compelling reason giving in favor of this thesis is time. It is what we should consider for doing everything and no matter how it is important. To clarify, the more time we seek better jobs the more time we lose. As an instance, when I finished my education and wanted to search for a job I decided to get a job at any price. Although that job was very low-paid I could get familiar with different people and I could get a better job through this. Moreover, I could publish different paper and books via this job and saved a little money. If I stayed jobless and didn't search for a job and seeking for a better job maybe I could find one but my time wasted and I couldn't publish or get familiar with people. As you can see, if I didn't get a secure job I wouldn't have been able to find a better job.
Another reason which can not unnoticed is the experience. It is what every employee and organization do care about so when we get hired in a secure job we should consider the experience and see it as an opportunity to get a better job. For example, my father has worked in several positions. Moreover, he always changes his job because he wanted a better job. Finally, he was hired in an oil company with the best salary. Although his hiring process was prolonged, it is neglected compared to his lower salary in the previous job. Furthermore, he earned a great experience working with different companies and he used it in oil company so his job was valuable because of experience. This experience thought me that, if my father waited for this job, he couldn't get it because he had to earn experience.
In sum, it is rational to get a secure job till an opportunity come up. Not only will it save our time but also it gives us a great experience. People should consider their time and future when they want to get a job and use the best opportunities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37727272727 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53422849198 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1536274778 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7391304348 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1304347826 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5652173913 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335440317254 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112384112494 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661296647071 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23176249832 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603433653587 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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