Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Our jab has a tremendous impact on our lives and well-being. It enhances our success endlessly because it encompasses our core. Therefore, I adamantly agree that if the people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for the job that would be more satisfying because having a secure career is becoming essential in term of benefit.
First of all, engaging in a secure function has a profound effect on people quality of lives. The matter of fact, working in a guaranteed career helps to improve the lives of people by achieving their goals. For instance, Nowadays, the population need to engage in a secure job to attain their necessities. So, if someone works in a reliable company, he can to provide their family all their needs such as have an excellent house, paying off the bills of water, and puts his kids in vital schools. Besides, having a fixed financial resource reduces the stress of the individual because he will know that he does not need to execute an extra function to make money. However, if the person is working in any job he likes it, he might lose his position after a while if he makes any mistake. Hence having a secure job is the foundation to have a prosperous life.
Second, being immersed in a secure job has a crucial influence on the generations' education. Indeed, when you work in a secure occupation, even though you do not satisfy with it, you can improve your horizon. for instance, I am a pharmacist; I used to work in a private pharmacy for seven years ago. One day, one of the well-known company is offering for me a secure position to work with them, I decided to accept the offer. I realized that in spite of I didn't like the new function, but this opportunity helps me to broaden my knowledge because I learned many different valuable skills regarding the new job. Also, having a new secure job gives me a chance to meet new people and makes a new friend; I met my best friend Sara while I am engaged in the secure job. As you can see, people should reassess their priority and exchange them to have a secure job.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, it is highly beneficial to work in a secure job rather than waiting for the satisfying one. Not only to boost your lifestyle, but also to enhance your education and social skills. Hopefully, all people follow this strategy to improve the populace.
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Essay evaluation report
in spite of I didn't like the new function,
in spite of the new function I didn't like,
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flaws:
need some complex or compound sentences.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 433 350
No. of Characters: 1922 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.562 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.439 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.496 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.789 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.242 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.179 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'help'?
Suggestion: help
...of fact, working in a guaranteed career helps to improve the lives of people by achie...
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Line 3, column 790, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... after a while if he makes any mistake. Hence having a secure job is the foundation t...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
...cure job has a crucial influence on the generations education. Indeed, when you work in a s...
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Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
... with it, you can improve your horizon. for instance, I am a pharmacist; I used to ...
^^^
Line 5, column 457, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...he offer. I realized that in spite of I didnt like the new function, but this opportu...
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Line 5, column 558, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... broaden my knowledge because I learned many different valuable skills regarding the new job. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, such as, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59027777778 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5776427018 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523148148148 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4512899725 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.15 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350520683268 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101259597442 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11145216789 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222234521349 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805702192359 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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