Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Finding an adequate job is indispensable part of humans' life in modern era. Therefore, when it comes to the question whether people should get a secure job right away or they should wait for a job which is more satisfying, job seekers adopt spread spectrum of attitudes toward this question depending on their characters and educational backgrounds. On the one hand there are people who adhere to the belief that getting more satisfying job is more logical since job security is just one aspect of adequate job; on the other hand, others beleive that geting a job with high level of security has several outstanding merits. As far as I am personally concerned, the latter carries further weight since not only does the secure job allow people to earn an steady money but also does it provide them an opportunity to get promotion in their work.
Having a constant salary is the key aspect of every successful life nowadays. In fact, people can manage their financial issues when they know they will receive an steady salary. Thanks to the inequality among people in the society, there are numerous renters in cities which need to earn money to pay the rent every month. So these people need to have a secure job to pay their rent and if they do not pay the rent, they should find another place to live. In other words, getting a secure job help people to fulfill their families' expectations. Moreover, the unemployment rate is very high in my country. So if people lose their job, they may not get another job very soon, as a result of which they will not be able to manage their familiy if they are unemployed for long period. Subsequently, people cannot manage their families, unless they have a secure job earning constant money.
Getting a secure job also increase the chance of getting promotion during the work. When employees work for long time in one workplace, they can express their talents and skills to make themselves stand out among other colleagues, as a result of which they will be offered an excellent career advancement. For instacne, an engineer who works in car company can take higher position in that company if he work there for several years, but if he changes his work several times, he will work as a simple engineer for the rest of their life. Consequently, provided people want to get promotion in their work, they should get a scure job.
To wrap it up, getting a secure job is more advatageous since not only does it aid job holders to manage their families' financial issues without any concern but also does it assist them to distinguish themselves from other colleagues to get promotion in their work. Therefore, if I would get a job now, I would have went for a job with high level of security.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...modern era. Therefore, when it comes to the question whether people should get a secure job right aw...
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Line 1, column 752, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...oes the secure job allow people to earn an steady money but also does it provide t...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...issues when they know they will receive an steady salary. Thanks to the inequality...
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Line 7, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ince not only does it aid job holders to manage their families financial issues w...
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Line 7, column 318, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[6]
Message: Note: went is a past participle of "wend". Did you mean 'gone' (past participle of "go")?
Suggestion: gone
... if I would get a job now, I would have went for a job with high level of security. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, in fact, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69022869023 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49035986976 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463617463617 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.3551703517 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.333333333 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7222222222 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330331520582 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125997503574 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826855799504 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22331136385 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576327150334 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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