Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Even though there is a widely held notion that people with secure jobs have more piece in their lives and should make every opportunity they might get in this manner seriously, I subscribe to the view that in order to achieve happiness in life, people should wait to find a job that is considerably exciting for them. My reasons of support are organized as the following.
To begin with, most adults dedicate the major proportion of their daily lives to working. Therefore, the more enthusiastic they become about their career, the happier they would feel in their lives. For instance, consider a man who has two options for his future career. One with high regular pay in which he would feel exhausted while he is working and another that its income would fluctuate, but it's totally well-suited to his interests. In my opinion, the second job will result in a much happier life where he considers himself as a valuable member of society and is satisfied with his contributions to the community.
Additionally, the most successful businessmen are those who have taken risky decisions in their careers instead of relying on a secure job and being too afraid to try new things. For instance, after college, my best friend and I both received a job offer from a company that had a lot of cooperation with students from our college. I immediately accepted the offer due to its reasonable salary. However, my friend didn't find the company's work exciting and was willing to start his own business. Even though I don't have any significant problem in my job, I still regret that I didn't join my friend in his start-up since his business has become considerably prosperous. This experience taught me that the key to success often lies in taking risks and brave choices than sticking to comfortable ordinary careers.
However, I believe that pursuing dream jobs is exclusively appropriate for young adults. I mean, people who are responsible for supporting their children and family financially should put their family's health and growth on the highest priority. For these people, it's not feasible to turn down jobs with a good salary and wait for more enjoyable jobs when their children have monetary issues.
In conclusion, because people spend most of their time at work and secure jobs usually don't reach the level of success of jobs which include risky choices and passionate hard-working, individuals should wait and continue searching for their desired jobs instead of settling for regular jobs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, i mean, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99761336516 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64868515732 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563245823389 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8984848619 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.176470588 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6470588235 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284524707979 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864099126282 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670485386978 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17859595021 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667766263417 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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