Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would he more satisfying.
one of the most important aspects of our life is having a job. jobs are like our second homes that we spent most of our times and thanks to jobs we have supplies for our life that we can use it for ourselves or for our families, but how to get a job is another thing that sometimes bother us. personally, i believe that taking an available job right away is far better than waiting for a job that one desires. I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explore in the following essay.
First of all, having a work experience is one of the fundamental steps towards better future for later in life. Nowadays, in most of cases it is preferable for having work experience whether you are a recent graduate or person who wants to plant to get his or her dream job in time because if you have the work experience then you acquire knowledge, understand your true self, and better for application for later use. my own experience is a compelling example of this. When i graduated from my university, i faced two options that one is to work in a experimental physics sector or wait for the position of astrophysics, which i've always dreamed of working, available in another sector. after careful analyzing and speaking to my parents, i decided to get the experimental physics job right away because in this way i can get two years working experience, which is necessary for the application of graduate degree, and i wouldn't waste my time for waiting the job i want, which i would leave for the graduate degree in future. now as i've worked for two years after my graduation, i've realized that useful fields like experimental physics is far better for future of my country than my immature dream of astrophysics. So this decision has helped me to understand what really life is like and what i really want in my life.
Secondly, having a job as soon as available would help a person to save more money. instead of waiting for desired jobs, people who are doing jobs and taking money have usually more savings, and having more money make life more comfortable and better for one's own life, family and people around us. For instance, my cousin who works in a mining company, not his desired field, which is a theatre. At first, he didn't like the field, but out of urgency of his family's needs that their family business got in a trouble, he got in the field, which in one advance is that salary is huge, right away instead of waiting a theatre having an available position. because of his salary, over time he liked his field more and even excelled at it. he now owns big house and have lots of fancy cars, and most importantly he helped his family out of a difficult situation and established and nurtured his family business.
In conclusion, i strongly believe that taking a job right away is much better. this is because, having a work experience is preferable for various cases and saving money soon is much better economically.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, another thing, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2401.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53875236295 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54412849362 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438563327032 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.9 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.6651087103 48.9658058833 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.368421053 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8421052632 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.5376344086 451% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297130476181 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104444339285 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813960065502 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19448183198 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446673469632 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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