Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At young ages, people are not being able to distinguish whether a thing is good or not, so it is not true that a child should learn to manage their own money at early age, in order to be responsible at adulthood. I completely disagree that this will become a person responsible. In the following essay, I will explain with two reasons why I believe so.
First, a few studies have shown that at early ages kids are focus doing activities accordingly with their ages, such playing simple games with different shapes and colors, rather that thinking on learning how to manage their money. Around ages three and five children did not realized the importance of money, so they are not aware that this exist. I disagree completely that children should be responsible on how to manage the money. They should spend their time doing activities proper of their ages. For example, my five years old son spend all his time playing with figures and puzzles. He does not even think if we have money to buy their games or his most favorite food. He just wants to play and enjoy the activities that he loves. I as his mother support him on everything that he needs and help him to enjoy his age as I did, because he will have time to worry in how to manage his money for his future.
Secondly, I believe that is too soon for a kid started worrying for things that came with years. Children have to enjoy their youth in a healthy way. For instance, I remember when I was ten years old my parents always encouraged me to enjoy my youth doing activities with kids with similar age like me. They never taught me how to manage the money for my adulthood because they were of the idea that this kind of things are not for kids and should be learn when people have certain ages. For that reason, I always thanked my parents because they led me enjoy my childhood.
In conclusion, we must not burn stages because everything has its time. Kids should enjoy their childhood and they will learn to manage their money within the past of the years.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45822102426 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26496904742 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474393530997 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4763418327 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8888888889 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6111111111 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268354161529 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925383793234 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756718922614 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180360309904 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775140783629 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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