technology has made children less creative than they were in the past?
The issue of whether technology has made children less creative than they were in the pass is very controversial. On one side supporters of the idea that new generation are less creative because the influence of technology mention that before that technology arrive our world, kids were able to create different things. On the other hand, critics of this maintain the beliefs that our new generation are quite creative and versatile. However, after a very careful consideration, I maintain that indeed, technology has been a bad influence in children because they have become unable to produce their own ideas.
First, in past generations kids did not have the possibility to use cell phones, computers, internet, or wiffi. They enjoyed when their parents or grandparents told stories about wild animals or whale that lived in a deep ocean. Their imagination was above and beyond because the stories seemed reals. As a result, children were able to have a creative imagination or when they have a homework they made them easy. I remember when my brother, Oscar started his kindergarten, her teacher assigned to him a really difficult work. He had to create a paper monster for his art class. Since my brother always listened the stories that my grandpa told him he was able to create the monster without problems. As we can see my brother used his imagination and creativity, rather than use technology that did not exist at that time.
Second, I believe that technology decrease kids level of creativity because, they do not use their minds to produce something, instead kids search everything they need in the internet. As a result, the creativeness never going to flow. I remember when i was studying art and music in the academy, every time that I needed to make a painting I researched in the internet. As a consequence, my painting was not as good as my friends that he used his creativeness.
In conclusion, for all that I mentioned before, I can affirm that technology has made children less creatives. the reason of that is because they want to use it for everything they going to do instead of thinking by their own.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, really, second, so, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96712328767 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02983971392 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501369863014 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.8622703298 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.866666667 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359539185001 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120521506237 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154614261605 0.0737576698707 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226396588701 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109571921594 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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