Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At early ages, children should focus on activities that benefit them, such as play in the playground, learn the colors, and little by little develop their brain. I believe that television should be restricted to children between ages two to five for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, all the time television is showing strong content, such as action movies, violence, and crime. At that ages, kids are vulnerable and are able to stick in their brain everything they watch on TV. As a result, sometimes kids get traumatized and they cannot sleep at night. For instance, I do not allow to my five years old kid watch any kind of television, nor advertising. He is very sensitive and always is scare. Last night he entered my room and the TV was on with an action movie the scene was violent and my son started crying and he was shaking, I tried to calm himself until he falls asleep. The next day he was very scared because he did not understand was had happened. As we can see, Television should not be allowed to young kids.
Secondly, advertising also has strong content. Sometimes even for adults are difficult to understand. Most of them have sexual content and are transmitted at a time where the kids are still awake. For example, marihuana advertising where it is said that the drug is used for medicinal purpose. I disagree with that because how is possible television is transmitting that kind of ad where kids are still awake. Aso, advertising is used to selling products such as cigarettes. As a result, kids are learning since they are young a few bad habits that are prejudicial for them. That is why I believe that television advertising must not be allowed for young children.
In conclusion, parents should take into consideration that television advertising would not improve their children life, but could deteriorate their growth and their positive way to think. Furthermore, television ads directed towards young children should not be allowed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87683284457 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69758699623 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557184750733 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.8012254718 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.15 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.05 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243579833951 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076112957243 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0965427194982 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160661089628 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657585410714 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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