Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Decision-making is one of the most prestigious attributes of human beings in comparison with other world creatures, as they have the power of thinking and making inferences. As a child is growing up, his or her decision-making power is becoming stronger. As a result, they incline to decide in some situations based on their own judgement. As for the dependency of young people to their parents in making decisions, some believe that in contrast to the past, today's the youth are better able to decide about their own lives, while others believe otherwise. I, personally, subscribe to the first idea. I believe that now, the youth are able to make decisions independently in quite a few situations with less need to their parents for some reasons, which are discussed hereunder.
First, it is crystal clear that today is the era of information, and all individuals, especially young people, are bombarded with many diverse information through different ways such as social networks. This high amount of data bring about more awareness for human beings such as the youth. The increase of awareness can improve the ability of decision-making. However, in the past which there was less information, young people had much difficulty in their own decision-making, which made them dependent to their parents. Thanks to acquired knowledge, today's the youth have less trouble in making decisions, so they are less dependent to their parents.
Secondly, in the past, according to the traditional structure of families, parents had more authority over their children lives, which made their children dependent to their parents in final decision-making. In contrast, most of today’s modern parents believe that their young children not only can make decisions about their own lives but also can counsel their parents in many situations in an excellent manner. Although these parents express their opinions to their children, they hardly ever impose their beliefs on them. As a result, today’s young people have enough power and freedom, which makes decision-making easier for them.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I believe that in contrast to young people in the past, today’s the youth can make their own life decisions effectively, with less dependence on their parents, on the ground that they have more knowledge by virtue of more information, and their parents let them to independently decide about their own lives. I wish someday comes when young people live a successful life by conscious decision-making about their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 341, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ituations based on their own judgement. As for the dependency of young people to t...
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Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much diverse information', 'a good deal of diverse information'.
Suggestion: much diverse information; a good deal of diverse information
...cially young people, are bombarded with many diverse information through different ways such as social n...
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Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an excellent manner" with adverb for "excellent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ounsel their parents in many situations in an excellent manner. Although these parents express their o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, as for, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28431372549 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96692973446 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463235294118 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.2844662932 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.823529412 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.507864500646 0.236089414692 215% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185457249916 0.076458572812 243% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119220904595 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.371368605807 0.150856017488 246% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596490988308 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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