Nowadays, most of the individuals believe that the effect of parents in youth’s lives declined remarkably in comparison with the past. I completely agree with this viewpoint and believe that the proportion of the youth who incline to decide individually has increased, and their decision does not depend on their parents as much as before.
To begin with, as the literacy rate in the youth communities has escalated considerably, individuals think that they can better manage harsh situations in solitude rather than interfering parents on their issues. It is a fact obvious that as the world is rapidly changing to be more complex and technology-based, the youth believe that they can better realize different situations than their parents. With this in mind, they claim that their parents’ beliefs are out of date, and it is not beneficial for them to obey their parents’ opinions. A method that a precocious student prefers to use for their study can be a compelling example of this. They do not oblige the rules that their parents persuade them, for they believe that the shown rope is not suitable for them and the method for learning courses has changed during the time. Moreover, they believe that their parents’ literacy is not sufficient to assist them in their lessons. Therefore, they do not ask their parents’ assistance, for they believe that they are more knowledgeable than them.
Secondly, as nowadays people tend to live individually, they rarely ask their parents for help, and they prefer to accept the responsibility of their activities by themselves. For one thing, since the rate of large families has decreased during the last decades, which means that the youth prefer to live lonely, they have to accept the potential risk in their lives, for they do not in their parents’ territory anymore. For another, people used to live not only with their parents, but also with their extended families, such as aunts and grandparents in the past. It is because they used to work traditionally and as a group. However, thanks to the industrial revolution, the youth incline to work in modern companies and as a solo-person to deal with their tasks, individually. Therefore, the effect of their parents on their private life has declined, for the youth do not live with them and depend on them.
In conclusion, there are several numerous reasons which can be persuasive enough to prove that nowadays, the rate of youth’s independency toward their parents has incremented considerably, for they believe that they not only have more knowledge than their parents, but also they prefer to live individually.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, for one thing, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15011547344 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91487903623 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43648960739 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.4369085144 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.375 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0625 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272104175859 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124607548049 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673261326832 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183189688485 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065722774682 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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