Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Making decisions is one of the most important skills which leads to prosperity of humans. In today's competitive world, people dealing with a lot of dilemmas and struggling to access better facilities that gaining all of them depends on their quality of decisions. Some people believe that in the past, young people get help from their parents for making decisions more than today, whereas some others hold opposite attitude. In my view, young people become more independent in decision making nowadays for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that people live close together in past which cause them to interfere each other's decisions. When young people live with their parents, parents are aware of each of their children information. Also, since in the past time young people have less opportunity to get involve in society, they have less experience which forced them to get help from their parent’s experience in their decision making. For example, when I was young, I lived in an extended family with my parents, grandparents, and older siblings. As in the past in our society, it is ironic for a girl to work outside the house, I had no experience in facing boys and determine them. Therefore, when I wanted to get married, I consulted with my family to make my decision. Since they had great amount of experience in this field, I could choose logically. In contrast, now, my girl lives far from us and she is a lawyer which provides her with more experience as mine. So, she easily gets her decisions by her own. If I had had a chance to get involve in society, I would make my decisions by my own.
Second, increase in the level of education of young people help them to make decisions by their own. Science is one of the strongest key to improve the knowledge of people. By this means, people can get familiar with various perspectives of each field and make a logical decision. For instance, statistics demonstrate that there is a direct relation between the ability to make independent decisions and the level of education. Researchers' investigation among two groups reveals that young people who have higher level of education could make better decisions without get any help due to not only they have vaster knowledge about different aspects of life, but they also have more confidence to stand on their own feet. As you can see, today, young people make their decisions independently.
In conclusion, I do believe that the role of parents in helping their children to make decisions is decrease. Today, not only do young people live far from their parents and have more role in society that help them make decisions, but they also have high level of education. I think young people should improve their decision making ability.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...hildren information. Also, since in the past time young people have less opportunity to g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2302.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89787234043 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60885163159 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448936170213 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6792914766 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.086956522 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4347826087 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477776499116 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16479730796 0.076458572812 216% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112249870587 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.350815995252 0.150856017488 233% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573942402571 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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