Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The ability to determine the course of one's existence is probably the single most obvious right every person posesses. After all, what distinguishes human beings from similar animals is that we are able to make decisions based on our mental capabilities. This is particularly of utmost importance when a youngster is attempting to decide how his/her plan for days ahead is going to be. In my view, in the past young people were not allowed to independently set out their plans for their futures. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, social norms and established hierarchies in numerous societies were enormous obstacles on the way of the youth's right to self-determination. To be more specific, it was widely viewed inappropriate if a juvenile desired to act without parents' authorization. The story of my grandmother clearly illustrates this point. At age 13, she was compelled in a way, to marry a person 23 years older than her. This, by nowadays standards is a complete catastrophe and indeed illegal in most countries, however this practice was unfortunately commonplace at that time. As a result of this, she had to bear an immensely unfortunate living just because of the fact that her parents thought they were choosing the best for their daughter and her husband will usher in a wonderful chapter in her life.
Furthermore, in this day and age due to the blitizing rate of technological advances and widespread ever-increasing access to quality education, younger generations are comparatively better equiped with necessary knowledge to encounter challenges and opt the best possible approaches accordingly. Moreover, the expansion of women's social involvement in societies along with political accomplishments such as women suffrage in various nations have rendered more tolerant and sympathetic communities. For instance, had it not been for my mother's insistence, my younger sister would have never had a chance to be graduated from a prestigious university so as to pursue a career in mechanical engineering. She could have simply made the same blunder that her ancestors did and comply with my father's conservative view that she ought not to apply for a university under any circumstance.
In sum, in my humble opinion, we all owe an eternal debt of gratitude to people who went before us to unravel archaic beliefs about the fact that younger individuals shall not make crucial decisions regarding their own lives simply since they do not know enough yet.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, after all, as to, for instance, i feel, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2124.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15533980583 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10473991422 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635922330097 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.8959584781 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.75 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179813763117 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502246709232 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649098939673 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11574251666 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713167396413 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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