Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Watching Television is one the most important early experiences nowadays children have with their surrounding environment. Sometimes the shows and programs that one watches as a child might have long lasting effect on the memory of that person. While some believe that T.V advertising should not be directed towards young children aged two to five others disagree. In my opinion, there are no major problems for children to be exposed to advertising for two key reasons.
First, watching television as a whole and advertising, in particular, might help them with developing their understanding abilities by strengthening their perception. There are lots of songs, poems and famous characters from cartoons that mostly appear on these ads. Children in that age group will certainly have a chance to enhance their verbal ability. I remember when I was around 5 years old there was a very popular show on television every Saturday called Ranginkaman. Like many other children at my age, I was absolutely amazed by that wonderful programs. The main character of that show was a puppet named Chera. He would sing beautiful songs and had many stories to tell that were intriguing for many us. One day I saw Chera in one of the ads shown prior to the main show which was, as far as I can remember, introducing a new lego toy featuring Chera and other characters from Ranginkaman. All of a sudden, I began singing just about every song I had ever listened to in the show. Unintentionally I had memorized all of them and now I was able to sing them all. As you can see, tv ads can sometimes have a powerful stimulating effect on children's minds.
Second, in many cases, the audience of commercials designed for children are not children themselves. Parents are sometimes the target of ads and for good reason. Imagine you want to buy a certain product for your children and do not have the time to go to a nearby store to ask about different products or their feature. If so, one the best places you can gain crucial information about various brands is the television. My mother always tells me about a car I wanted to have when I was a preschooler. I had seen a huge plastic car that one of my friends had, which had pedals and wheels that enabled it to move around like a normal car the only difference being in the fact that it didn't have an engine. I insisted on having one, but the problem was that my parents didn't know where to buy one. They looked for it in many local stores but couldn't find one. After a week or so the same car was featured on a tv ad with a telephone number to order one. That was a big relief for all of us and of course had it not been because of that particular commercial I wouldn't have my pretty looking car ever.
In sum, while many might disagree I think that tv advertisements designated for children can be used positively. Not only they help perceptual and verbal capabilities of a child but also assist parents in choosing the right products for their beloved children. So that why I hold the opinion that children should be allowed to watch tv commercials owning to the fact that they can learn a lot from it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, then, while, i think, in particular, of course, in many cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2587.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 563.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59502664298 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67602039481 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516873889876 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 813.6 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9254471803 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3928571429 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1071428571 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161469987494 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472414883479 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06748672476 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121736235014 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072945432743 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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