Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Having access to a vast ocean of accumulated human knowledge is an important part of our lives. We all need to be informed for various purposes such as decision making, researching or simply out of basic curiosity. Whatever the reason, crucial role of information cannot be overstated. Some believe that too much access to information can be a source of concern, while others hold the view that the advent of internet and consequent information burst is a positive phenomenon. In my view, there are more to be wary of about this seismic change in the way we get our information than to celebrate, for two key reasons.
First, internet has proven to be quiet addictive especially for younger people. through numerous ways youth get excessively involved with the internet, the most notable of which are online games and social networks. For instance, one my friends in college who was in everyone's view was impressively talented, began to fail gradually in his courses. In a matter of months, he went from being the top students and a potential candidate to represent the college in international olympiads to a below average one who struggled mostly not to fail in any subject. Everybody in the mechanical engineering department from professors to other students, were confused. After a while the reason behind this catastrophic decline became evident. He was spending a staggering 6 hours a day on social networks. Facebook, Twitter and Instagram consumed most of his time during the day. As you can see, too much exposure to information through internet can be a huge distraction for even the brightest among us.
Second, by the massive amount of information being available online there is less tendency among people to refer to authentic sources and to the hard work required for a proper research. Why bother to go through many pages of original copies of encyclopedias or other valuable textbooks while you can get what you require by just visiting a not much credited website. For instance, when at my last year in university, i was assigned to form a group in order to conduct a research on a specific problem in cell proliferation, i was the only one in the group to study in detail all the necessary background knowledge about the cell. Others in the meantime tried to take a shortcut by merely looking for preliminary data about how the cell growth process was completed. Unfortunately owing to this, our group made serious mistakes during the experimental stages of the research and were forced to abort the entire project.
In sum, though some might think that increased access to information is valuable without any conditions, I hold the view that it can have some significant detrimental effects on human lives. Not only does it endanger the lives of younger people if used without restraints but also it can have reprecussions in the way scientific research is conducted.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, then, while, for instance, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2412.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97319587629 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87675050794 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567010309278 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 771.3 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0563535563 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.857142857 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0952380952 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164836162162 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043935963296 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427508822537 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988475283996 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0157926168879 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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