Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, the independence of children has altered a lot in societies. Certainly, some people, if I asked would agree with the statement that parents get engaged to the children's life more than before while the others would mention that the question depends on a plenty of factors. I firmly believe that young people are more independent rather than before. It what follows, I will elaborate on the most important reasons.
First, it is important to consider that nowadays young people spend more time outside than in the past. They go to school half of a day and they surf the net in the rest of the day. Due to the fact, they do not spend time with their parents to talk to them and solve their problems. Today, most of the young people just stay on their own and make their decisions themselves even their parents do not know about their issues. For example, my brother is 15 years old. He says most of his difficulties to his friends instead of my parents. Last month, one of his friends came to my parents and said about my brother’s problem. I think this is the case for many other people as well.
Equally important is that nowadays both of parents work out so it is obvious they do not have time to spend on their children. As a result, young people prefer to make their own decisions and do not counsel with their parents for help. Young people are alone most of the time at homes and when the parents come back from work; they are too tired to talk to the children. To illustrate this idea let us consider the following example, one of my friends always complain that her parents work all the time and do not spend time with her. Hence, she was so frustrated and disappointment and do her tasks just without their attention and permission.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that in most cases young people are better able to make decisions for their lives than before.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, so, well, while, for example, i think, as a result, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55397727273 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40381705919 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4636573032 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0555555556 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407684803788 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121431194324 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134673621816 0.0737576698707 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244421837823 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0833164092964 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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