Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A glance at people's attitude toward decisions in the past and now, brings to the light a question that has provoked a debate several times, namely, whether young people are more dependent on their parents or not. In my opinion, as a newly mother who experienced a lot of difficulties, nowadays individuals prefer to make their own decisions instead of asking advise from older people. Although some may think in some countries, still people accept older rules and behave base on their permission, I would say it is not true about the majority of the world.
The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea lies in the fact that more education allows students to have more self-confidence. For example, most of them go to college or university which are far from their homes and they have to handle their lives without any help. This independency makes them stronger and assists them to deal with hardships. Therefore, after upper levels of education teenagers believe that they are more able to find the correct decision even about important issues such as marriage or career.
Another subtle point that I should deem is the fact that the Internet increases our knowledge about different subjects. For instance, when I was pregnant, my mother could not answer all of my question and resolve my doubts. After searching through the Google I could find the best option for me and after consulting with my doctor I was aware about everything. Hence, the Internet enables us to find similar experiences and information to choose the best option.
Admittedly, in some small countries, people still prefer to consult with their parents even if they do not have any professional information about a subject. One of my friends from Indonesia told me that she would not get pregnant unless her parents allow her. It is not acceptable for me, since nobody can understand my situation better than me and my husband so after getting pregnant I announced it to my close family and after 16 weeks I publicly celebrated my pregnancy and had a gender reveal party. As a matter of fact, there is not the same opinion about making decision all over the world.
Due to aforementioned discussion explored in the previous statements, I strongly asserts that younger people have the capacity to make their own decision, even though it is better to consult with their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You used an adverb ('newly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('mother') instead of another adjective.
...their parents or not. In my opinion, as a newly mother who experienced a lot of difficulties, ...
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'assert'
Suggestion: assert
... in the previous statements, I strongly asserts that younger people have the capacity t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, may, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, such as, as a matter of fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9175 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66598832518 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5725 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.3646804556 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.9375 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292169960235 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906267523714 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699701641274 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162461107737 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072494480071 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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