Family play a pivotal role on their children independency. Some people believe that Youth was depended too much on their parents than today. However, others disagree. In my opinion young people are not independence for their family as in the past. I feel this way for two reasons which H will explore in following essay.
First, Younger generation could work and gain financial independence. When you have your job position thus you can rich amounts of money which help you to take financial independent. The more financial you have, The more independence you gain. One of my friend's experience is a good case in point. I have a friend, she was the first child, family. She has started her job when she was 16 years old. While she had worked for herself thus, she had her financial independent in her family. Therefore, when she made new decision in her life, not only her parents have not refuse her but also respect about her new choice. This circumstance helps her feel so independency. This example clearly illustrates that because young people have their own financial independence they have not been too much depend on their family.
Second, social approach change in value, IF you live in modern society, therefore you can see the cultural change in the family, which is shown that how parent have changed their behavior and respect to their child decision. My own experience is a good example. I remember that when I was 18 I do want to make my own decision and travel to Italy but I have never done it. Because I felt that my parent never do I allow to go there because they think that I could not carry myself. However, in a same situation after seven years later when my little sister decided travel alone to foreign country my parent allowed her. The cultural change lead family allow their child be more free. This example clearly shows that how much society has changed and parents have more respected to their teenager’s selection.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that adolescents are not dependent too much of their family as before. It’s not only for financial independence, but also for social approach are changing in value.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 8, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'plays'.
Suggestion: plays
Family play a pivotal role on their children indepe...
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Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d work and gain financial independence. When you have your job position thus you can...
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Line 5, column 420, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'going', 'gonna'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: going; gonna
... I felt that my parent never do I allow to go there because they think that I could n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82795698925 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56823291896 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510752688172 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3226749713 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.8333333333 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29166666667 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254968756997 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072570761943 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801445870742 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174472708483 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729725583989 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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