Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

The statement that knowing about events happening around the world is absolutely significant, regardless of whether or not it will affect our daily life. Here goes my reasons.
Firstly, the events can affect daily life of other people. For instance, recently a fire broke in a forest. Thirty firefighters sacrificed in this catastrophe. What a huge loss it is for their family as well as for our society. It is apparently there exits no direct relation among us, but under no circumstance can I live a happy life without their struggles and efforts. The people who serve as policemen, soldiers also grant our safety even if we never see them.
Additionally, we can mine valuable information from the events, then utilize them to do something. The intrinsic messages buried in the events may aid you in making money. Take the market of stock as an example, recently a kind of super fungus came into being, which can result in death of sixty percents rate. The wise people may learn from this news, consequently they bought the stock in the block of medicine. It is very obviously that the price of medicine stock went higher dramatically. As you can see, it is a way of making one's fortune if you know the relationship among current events and your work.
Last but not least, knowing the events can broaden your knowledge as well as widen your horizon, stimulate your interests. If you know how the dogs and cats exchange their emotions, how the Everest got the height, how clean is the water in Dali, how fast the trains in china are. You will get a lot of joy as well as share it with your friends.
To conclude, I strongly agree with the statement. Whether each person or each event is relevant to us depends on our attitudes to it.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, so, then, well, as for, for instance, kind of, you know, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1431.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6461038961 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55240858671 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61038961039 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2896093324 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.3157894737 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2105263158 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304063059934 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791089283606 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103943306384 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164092241738 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100598521279 0.0645574589148 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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