Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
The policy governments adopt to assign credits to different parts of infrastructures varies from country to country. In this regard, many believe that improving public transportation should be among the top priorities of the budget assignment since it directly contributes to having a green environment, and then a healthy life. However, others have the conviction that the internet plays a crucial role in the modern era, without which many facilities we enjoy in our everyday lives would disappear. I am personally unanimous with the latter group for two main reasons, which I will elucidate in the following essay.
To begin with, the internet also contributes to preserving the earth’s environment, but not directly. Today, thanks to the internet, people are able to carry out their task online instead of traditional methods. For instance, new communication methods based on the internet such as e-mail or some online drivers that keep and share documents lead to a drastic decline in paper consumption. Another example is online shopping instead of getting in a car and do it in person, which results in a dramatic reduction in the levels of CO2 emissions. Moreover, any individual from all around the world, who has the possibility to connect to the internet worldwide is exposed to many green tips that make them aware of the consequences of human activities. Therefore, within a lot of repetition over time, it has become a culture among people to notice and take action to save the earth. For instance, today many people are aware of the disadvantages of using plastic bags or private cars since these green tips have been circulating among users of the internet for a while. Therefore, the government can take advantage of the internet to establish the culture of using public transportation or other green actions in favor of saving the environment.
Secondly, the internet provides people with easy access to a wide range of useful information. For instance, many well-known and valid universities have launched online programs for those, who do not have the opportunity to enroll in a university and benefit by attending the classes in person. This facility paves the way for many people to pursue their personal dreams regardless of their age, geographical location and other barriers, which stands between them and their goals. My friend’s experience is a compelling example of this. She had always dreamed about being an architect, but she had to quit the university due to some financial problems and family commitments. However, she decided to enroll in an online program in architectural design on edX – Harvard University online programs. Fortunately, it worked out for her, and after passing all the exams with high scores, she got a degree from Harvard University. Now, she works as a designer at a famous architectural company. So we see, taking out the internet from the story, my friend would never have had a chance to achieve her heart wish.
To wrap it up, considering the aforementioned points, I believe that it is far better to allocate more money to the internet access because not only will it help to save the environment due to the profound influence it has on people, but it also eases the way for many individuals to be professional at their favorite job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
The policy governments adopt to assign credits to different parts of in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 52.1666666667 173% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2765.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 546.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0641025641 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92884631276 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549450549451 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 892.8 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6530874185 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.681818182 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8181818182 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162874781211 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433149221594 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344638011588 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.098724518084 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145471246188 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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