Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying, that in this sophisticated and progressive era where we live, governments and policy makers are concerned with different approaches to facilitate living situation within their country. Two factors that directly influence people’s lives are the quality of Internet and the public transportation infrastructure. While some governments prefer to allocate financial budget to improve public transportation, on the other side of the continuum stand others, believing that the Internet improvement should be emphasized. As far as I am concerned, the quality and accessibility of the Internet is more important. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated hereunder.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that Internet is a state of the art technology and it is changing in an interesting rate, while public transportation is actually an older one. All major cities around the world have been equipped with sufficient public transportation facilities by now. But there is a difference regarding to the Internet, some huge steps are still needed, and these steps mostly need money that should be provided by the government. For instance, my own city which is located in Iran hosts a variety of different public transportation vehicles such as subway and buses, but when it comes to Internet, people demand more effort from the government, because they cannot receive the desired signal on their mobile phones to access the web wherever in the city they want. So the government should improve this lack of accessibility immediately.
In addition, in the last decades, people have used the public transportation to do chores in different parts of their hometown, most of these chores are diminished by the introduction and world wide spread of the Internet. Under such circumstances, I believe that in the future a huge proportion of daily trips will not be necessary anymore because people can do them from their homes by some single clicks on the monitor using Internet. An example can drive this notion home. Consider someone who wanted to mail a letter in 1980, he had to shuttle between the post office and home in order to mail it. But now, almost every person on the planet uses Internet to mail his or her letters, so a great deal of trips are not mandatory anymore. So if governments support the Internet, these useful changes can be achieved earlier.
In sum, having the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I believe it would be better for the government and the people living in the society if policy makers spend money on improving the Internet. Because it requires severe money to stay up-to-date and it can diminish the necessity of the public transportation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 55, Rule ID: STATE_OF_THE_ART[1]
Message: Did you mean 'state-of-the-art'?
Suggestion: state-of-the-art
... it is crystal clear that Internet is a state of the art technology and it is changing in an int...
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: worldwide
... are diminished by the introduction and world wide spread of the Internet. Under such circ...
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: WORLD_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worldwide'?
Suggestion: worldwide
... are diminished by the introduction and world wide spread of the Internet. Under such circ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, regarding, so, still, while, for instance, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2280.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15837104072 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00501209047 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552036199095 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.2659771993 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.666666667 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5555555556 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245075454417 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773345210686 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565200481645 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165032749892 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565322264807 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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