There is no shortage of debates that people can be initiative in their fields for some reasons that can be either learned or naturally done. I completely disagree with the idea that for being an initiative, people need it naturally, and cannot be learned. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Initially granted, I think that people can learn the leadership by the help of people surrounding him, who are initiative in the fields they engage. It is clear that while young, people try to imitate their parents or other acquaintances, and by the way children prefer to behave like the best ones surrounding them. For example, my elder cousin always wanted to imitate the traits of her mother, who was leader in her work for contributions she made, and in consequence she graduated a prominent high school with first place. In addition to this reason, the nature of surrounding people can directly have influence on the child to be a leader in future in his sector. Therefore, surroundings are crucial reason for demonstrating leadership in the field people engaged.
Secondly, children mostly acquire the skills and abilities, such as leadership, in school or in some social activities. It is obvious that today education and sociality is considered to increase self-esteem and leadership in their fields by teaching them some new abilities that are necessary in future life. My own experience is a good example for this reason. Until I entered initial school, I was very shy that could not do anything, even I was the worst student in the class. But after teachers trained me for better, I have become the leader of the class. Furthermore, some school activities are designed and require the students to organize it and reveal their leadership activity. Hence, schools can be another reason for growing up a child with an ability of leadership.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that leadership cannot be a cognitive ability, but an ability acquired gradually, influencing by nature of children.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00293255132 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82887100418 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560117302053 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0514805438 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.625 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3125 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5625 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189268793505 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665756678623 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465093579095 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120569698713 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338088993043 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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