There is no shortage of debate about the supervision of parents on their children in every situation, especially in education. Personally, I completely agree with the idea that parents are more careful and interested in their children’s education that how they study or behave than it was in past. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
Initially granted, the reason for my agreement is that the new technological advances, such as online information about the children available on internet, allow parents closely involve in their children’s lessons. It is clear that it is more convenient for parents to get necessary information to control the lessons and behaviors of children, without the need of going to school to talk with teachers. For example, my friend’s parents were busy with their own businesses, so they hardly find time to go to school. But, recently, Education Ministry of our country made accessible to find every school-time information about children. In addition to this reason, thanks to some advances in technology, schools now regularly send annual results of children’s performances with the help of e-mail to parents. Therefore, technological can be considered as a reason for parents’ involving in their children’s lessons more carefully.
Secondly, because education is developing much more compared with past decades, and governments pay closer attention to the children; thus, governments require parents to closely involve in their children’s lessons. It is obvious that schools organize some meetings for parents and make inevitable these to come school for hearing about their children’s best and worst aspects. My own experience is a good example for this reason. My brother always chattered in lessons, sometimes interrupting lessons; so my brother’s behavior disturbed his teachers. Annoying for this, teachers held a meeting that week to talk to all parents about children, especially my brother. In consequence, my mom reproved him very bad, resulting him to be very silent student. Furthermore, the schools attend children’s parents to engage in children’s lessons to see their respond as a requirement of Education Ministry. Hence, requirements of schools for parents are another reason for parents to be more careful in children’s lessons.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that recently parents are being more careful and involved in their children’s education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: in the past
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5942408377 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32192764167 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534031413613 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2332830947 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.722222222 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357011802743 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141325710962 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868740262702 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264710473478 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258581002148 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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