There is no shortage of debates whether or not sports and social activities should be funded at equal level with libraries and classes because these have major impact as classes and libraries have. Personally, I completely agree with the opinion that sports and social activities are as crucial as the classes and libraries, thus they should receive equal amount of money as those. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
Initially granted, my first reason for this agreement is that in universities and colleges, students are more forced to study and they experience more stressful conditions while taking exams. It is clear that they need relaxing and resting at least for a little time for relieving the stress made by lesson burdens with the help of social activities and sports in leisure time. My own experience is a good example for this reason. My friend is studying at the second-grade level at the university, and he has many exams and lessons to pass that are very stressful. For this concern, he applied to a psychologist to talk about how he can relieve his stress level while preparing for exams. The psychologist advised him to get a fitness course or to be a part of any social communities for the juvenile people parallel with the lessons. In addition to this reason, these courses can improve their self-confidence while being active in social activities. Therefore, importance of sports and social activities should be considered for receiving equal amount of supportive money.
Secondly, taking part in social activities and sports at parallel with classes and libraries may increase their responsibility for future days. It is obvious that if scholars engage in much more activities as well as lessons, they will learn to do many things together while they are working. For example, a computer engineer who participated in social activities as well as in lessons actively at university he can make an additional business for himself because he learned to work with more burden and responsibility. Thus, he can make additional money with the help of the experiences made at university years. Furthermore, this responsibility may help to pay attention equally to each lesson and exam. Therefore, for improving the responsibility level sports and social activities should be funded at equal amount.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that social activities must be one of the important parts of their life and for providing this demand government or university should fund even amount of money for these activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
There is no shortage of debates whether or not sports and social activities should be ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, at least, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2159.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10401891253 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86287732819 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486997635934 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5090634628 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.944444444 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262259353374 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10476224129 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12384114977 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196717851695 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0970574822599 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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