Since dawn of industrial revulation, new inventions played vital roled in each civilisated society. Due to contuniously changing world, they have improved quality of our life. Nowaday, many are adamant that a myriad of elements should be taken into consideration in order to examinate its constructive and destructive facets of this issue. Some people may hold the view that every generations added one step for next one in order to increase life standard. However, other refute it and say it is fallacy. From my vantage point, I concur with former group and the lines will shed light on my viewpoint.
First exquisite point to mentioned is that the importance of computers. Life conditions has boosted by the invention of computers. In the past, people used to work for long hours to finish some duties but today computers do all complicated work and calculations for people. Individuals spend much more time with their families since computers allow people to work less hours. A vivid example which can given to the subject is one of my own experience. My father was a accountant in a bank in Istanbul in Turkey. I remember that he works until midnight since he made calculation manuel. Now I also work in a bank but we use computer for calculation even for comlex decision modelling. Consequently, we have much more time for familiy compared to the last generation
In approaching this issue, apart from what mentioned above, there is a subtle point which borne in mind. Compared the older people, intellegent of young people is high since the quality of food. New generations eats healty food and have better healty conditions. A noteworthy refreshingly intelligent statistics revealed by a recent research which conducted at MIT University in the USA shows that the IQ of young people is higher than their grandparents even parents. The research has conducted between four different elementray school in order to eleminate standard error. As a result, the research shows new generation has better life qualitiy which
To wrap up once can conclude that we have better life quality and healthy since the technologies make life easier. If there is not an advance in technologies we would have same life contidition which our olders have. I believe that computers played vital role in these advancement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eve that computers played vital role in these advancement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, apart from, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07853403141 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82367432635 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594240837696 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8537019604 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1818181818 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3636363636 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0779600952328 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0203074547285 0.076458572812 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.021422255629 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0453948772435 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149545002589 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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