Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the advent of televisions and movies a new era began in the history of human as people could see what was before only an illusion. As it began in mid 1950s the movie and media industry have grown enormously to the point that now in every house we can find at least a television. I completely disagree with that statement and believe while some may say watching television and movies have adverse affect, I believe it has more benefits. In the following I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons which convinced me to put forward this idea.
First and foremost, televisions are a perfect source of knowledge. As people grow more knowlegable, they behave better while televisions shows contain some documentries and shows about important manners they can teach people how to behave. As an example, I have a sister and she has a six years old son but the son is a delinquent. His behavior is horrible which got my sister to the point she used to cry. At the same time I saw a documentry about a nanny who was also a psychologists in London. The show was about how to treat with children who had the same manner as my sister's son. By whatching this documentry my sister learned how to counter her problem and as a result her son behavior changed deeply. So Television can be good resource to learn from.
Another point one should concider to account this significant is televisions and movies can depict phenomenas which have not happened yet. Using this feature some directors illustarte consequences of our decisions and behaviors so we would know what would happen in the future and as a result people care more about how they behave. My personal experience is compelling example of this. I used to behave unfair with my family and most of the time we did not talk to each other. I saw a movie named "a night in the sky" about a boy whose behavior was just like mine and he had a father in that movie. In that movie after a fight with the boy, the father gets angry and has a heart strike which led to his death. Whatching this movie I recognized the same thing can happen to me and I do not want to loose my father. As a result I changed my behavior since I understood that I was the one who were wrong. Now I have a more happy life as my family do too.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples advocate the fact that movies and televisions have their own benefits. This is because the have an ability to depict feauter outcomes and it contains documentries which can educate people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a psychologist' or simply 'psychologists'?
Suggestion: a psychologist; psychologists
...a documentry about a nanny who was also a psychologists in London. The show was about how to tr...
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Line 9, column 809, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...g can happen to me and I do not want to loose my father. As a result I changed my beh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, while, at least, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52069716776 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57463434914 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496732026144 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6583487255 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2173913043 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9565217391 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5652173913 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174853857158 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518171612122 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444787724547 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12001775597 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410931359738 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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