Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By the advent of modern technology, it is generally accepted that television play a vital role in our life because of what it shows in different hours of the day. Some people believe that TV has some adverse effects on the behavior of young generation more than some positive impacts, other people do not think so. It is chalenging that prefer one to another because both of them have their advantages or their disadvantages. As a matter of fact, there are numerous reasons why the number of positive affects of TV is more than the host of bad affects, and I would explore only primary one here.
In the beginning, the first aspect to point out is that the knowledge of people will be increased by watching some useful programs that have a significant impact on the treatment of the young people in the society. In fact, the widespread programs have provided for youth to teach some crucial behavior to them. For example, one of the important paly that Tv are showing for children is the way of respecting to people specialy parents and teachers. So the productivity of this paly was excellent among children and their parents that has a significant outcome due the fact that they were educated to respect to the older people.
Second, the most compelling point is that the younger can benefit from TV to fill their leisure time instead of doing some harmfull activities by watching some movie with their parents. To illustrate this point only needs only refer to a situation in society that student spend their spare time with some of bad friend by doing some acts like smoking. Particulary, TV cna give a chance to people for spending their time with their children at home. If the student dedicate some of their time to watching comedy movies, it will support them to have a strong relationship with their parent because of spending time with each other.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw that some profound impacts will be effected on the behavior of children by watching TV; therefore, it not only lead to enhance the knowledge of people but also help them to fill their spare time correctly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, in fact, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1754.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72776280323 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48823416816 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.3534752779 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.923076923 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5384615385 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157271052658 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607301729611 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477000330812 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982249099425 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478578643781 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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