Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time
job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents are the best teacher of teenage children and they the most influential person of children life. Encouragement from the parents will give a secure life when a child will be adult. However, a plethora of people contents that encouragement for a part-time job is unimportant but others disagree with the statement. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelmed. Among this controversy, I personally believe that to secure better future parents should encourage teenage children to take part in a part-time job. I feel this way for several reasons I will expound in the subsequent followings.
To commence with, a part-time job will teach children how difficult life is. They will learn the practical situation of life without parents. If parents encourage them to stand out own's feet they can easily be independent and adapted to the situation in future. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I admitted to the college I faced some financial problems and shared with my parents. Before that I never did any job, thus I felt very nervous to take a job. But, my parents motivate me to take a job because it will help me in future to face a difficult situation. Moreover, they told me, when they were not alive before that they want me to be an established person. That's really encouraged me and then I tried to be an independent person.
Furthermore, children often do not know how difficult to earn money then spend. Moreover, sometimes it is easy to earn but difficult to save money. If parents influence them to take the job they will easily realize that how the parents struggle for children from years to years. Moreover, they will know the value of money and try to spend the money on the relevant stuff. For instance, I have a brother who was very spendthrift from his teenage age. Sometimes it was difficult for my parents to afford his unnecessary stuff. Thus, my parents told him to take a part-time job to fulfil your expectation. when he got a job after graduation he faced difficulty to afford house rent, food and other stuff. Therefore, he realized that how parents afford their expense. Now, he is totally thrift person which really help him to secure a successful future.
To recapitulate, I am on the opinion that parents are the best person to encourage the teenage children to prepare for the adult life because they teach us how to face a difficult situation, adapt with that condition and how to overcome the situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to house'
Suggestion: to house
...raduation he faced difficulty to afford house rent, food and other stuff. Therefore, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2087.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85348837209 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77010229753 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46511627907 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5656283795 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.2692307692 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5384615385 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69230769231 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256549583352 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725104498694 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603088178411 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177154315777 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624284969133 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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