Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As everything in life is like a coin that two different sides, people must weigh the pros and cons before jumping to a conclusion. After all, each and every question or topic requires careful deliberation in that there are multiple variables to the truth. Even though some may adamantly believe that Human beings benefit from traveling abroad than traveling to their own country, I strongly think such an opinion lacks coherence to some extent. In my humble opinion, it would be much more beneficial if people roam around their motherland for several compelling reasons.
First and foremost, the majority of individuals would agree with the notion that at first people should love their own homeland and try to explore the countryside as much as possible which will engender a myriad of advantages. The main reason behind this rationale is that wherever we grew up is the most sacred and comfortable zone for us because of the culture, ethnicity, language and close relations. In other words, we are habituated to our local food, daily activities and places as people around us always try to gossip more about it and by listening much about those we are getting used to it. For instance, last year, I visited hill tracks of our countryside cause my friends are so much enthusiastic and adventurous to see and explore those places. It took us about ten hours to travel by bus to reach that spot. After getting down from the bus we hired a jeep and the tour guide take us to the most aesthetic place of that land. He was so popular among the guides cause he is much curious about finding new locations that are undiscovered by the local residents. He told us, “Two of the adventurous group safely reached this spot”. We were so lucky to explore the scenic beauty of nature. After visiting that spot, we did go to a tribal village for a meal on that day and I was so overwhelmed by the hospitality and food arrangement of the hilly local people. We spent three nights and two days and it didn’t cost that much, though we created a lot of memories to cherish for life long.
On the top, traveling abroad may result in unfavorable ramifications cause of not much familiarity. In the eyes of many people in the present society, this can be alluring and lavish cause it can create a posh effect in peoples’ minds. Although traveling abroad countries is much fun but to me it one should research a lot before going to a new place outside of his homeland. A compelling example of my uncle who faced so much harassment while he was on a business trip to Germany.
In summary, it’s virtually impossible to provide a completely satisfying answer to an open-ended question. Although the jury may be out on this given essay topic, we can come to a mutual argument that it’s better to visit one’s motherland due to these reasons and details mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, thus, while, after all, for instance, in summary, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2403.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78685258964 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6718286685 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56374501992 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3555672944 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.428571429 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9047619048 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1602903299 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438396890678 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469782211472 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0948234368442 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496665315091 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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