Nowadays, in a world that is rapidly changing, individuals should pay vital attention to their leisure time besides hard-working. In this situation, some people prefer to spend their leisure time on activities which are relevant to their job, while, others incline to do different things which completely vary from their job project. Although both of these viewpoints have several advantageous and disadvantageous, I, personally, agree with the second idea due to several conspicuous reasons which will be elaborated as follows.
To begin with, people can better work on all of their characteristics rather than being as a one-dimensional person by doing different activities irrelevant to their career. It helps them to find friends and have better communication with others. Also, it will increase their creativity and efficiency at work, for they increase their knowledge and social behaviors. An example can drive this notion dramatically home. I used to work as a researcher in the field of environment. Whenever I went with my family, I tried to find something related to my major, which made my parents annoyed. Additionally, I could not find any friends for I only focused on my job, and it not only was boring for others but also made me be in solitude, which decreases my concentrate. As the time I preferred to get relaxed on holidays, I could better manage both my job projects and leisure time, which directly affects two different dimensions of our personality.
Moreover, it is remarkable to mention that doing a particular activity without distraction, causes individuals to suffer from mental illness. It rises keenly in stressful jobs. An example can shed some light on this issue. Imagine that you can eat your favorite food every day. It looks great at first glance, however, after a while, it will completely change, and you cannot even smell this food. This example can expand to other areas. Therefore, it is better to make distinguish between resting and working by not concentrating on work activities or even related subjects our leisure time, for releasing mind pressure.
In conclusion, there are several reasons to reveals that it is better for individuals to spend their leisure time in an activity, which is not has a connection with their job projects. I, totally, support my idea with two noticeable ideas, which can be seen in the previous paragraphs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...can be seen in the previous paragraphs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14615384615 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94751480471 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2558075657 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.35 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208912900992 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576199175872 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479179251552 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126613886615 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288346416315 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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