Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Professional athletes, such as football and basketball players, do not deserve the high salaries that they are paid.
In the modern era, sports have become a widespread activity most people are in touch with daily. Although a lot of people enjoy watching these games in their free time, many people think of it as a dream job to become an athlete. The controversial question which arises here is whether the professional athletes deserve the high salaries that they are paid or not. As far as I am concerned, these professional athletes do earn high salaries. The following paragraphs will elucidate my perspective.
First and foremost, the number of high paid athletes are quite a few, and not all the athletes can earn high salaries. Some sportsmen are well-known all around the world, and a lot of people watch games only to follow their favourite athlete. A recent study conducted in Spain suggests that the fans of Real Madrid games, a soccer team based in Madrid, have increased by 20 per cent after Ronaldo, a famous soccer player, joined the club. This study clearly shows not only a professional athlete seems to adherents but also he can affect the number of viewers. Since these top athletes are few, and they lead the games to remarkable moments of every individual’s lives, they deserve those high salaries.
A second noteworthy point to mention is that professional athletes had practiced for many years to accomplish their goals. Becoming a professional athlete is not a commonplace activity. Their career needs consistency and hard work. Generally speaking, they have to keep the requirements of their job in mind all the time. Those athletes have to be aware of what type of food can they eat and what kind of activities are they allowed to do in their pastime. So one can say, the hardships of remaining a great athlete are no less than becoming one.
To sum up, the road of becoming a professional athlete is full of difficulties, and remaining one is no less tricky. Neglecting this fact may lead everybody to believe this career as a banal one. I think that professional athletes deserve the high salaries they are paid. It is universally acknowledged that the hardships a person may come across during his career should have a direct relation with the money he earns.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, well, i think, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86058981233 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77049698252 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525469168901 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.65 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.65 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18553597837 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654705204707 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807188807681 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124196017956 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408394643493 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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