Do you agree or disagree with the following statements？ Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans and modern technology, more and more people tend to explore new things so, the humans spend much time to discover many things around them. Although many argue that the people today do not do a lot of things because them works a plethora of time, In my opinion, people doing a lot of effort in their life to achieve their goals and doing more things in their home and work to achieve satisfaction for are both family and manager. I would suggest two reasons based on my general facts to support the argument.
The first aspect to point out is that it is widely accepted that society today has become more and more competitive. To survive in this society. Take an example, young generation today under great pressure. In school, you have to compete with your classmates so as to get higher grates. At home, you have to compete with your brother and sister so as to obtain praise from your parent. At work, you have to compete with your colleagues so as to win the heart of in-charge. Therefore, it's impossible for young people today to get away with such competition. Furthermore, I would like to mention noteworthy researched conducted by SCR institute in India. The discovered suggest results that Seventy-Five Percent of young people indulge themselves in many activities to achieve their goals which are effected on the society.
Secondly, there has been a positive correlation between trying doing more things and being successful. I still affirm the same idea because there is no guarantee that success has a close tie-in motivation and creativity. My own experience is a compelling example of this I remember when I was a child I saw my father usually come from his work and then help my mother in cleaning our house and then he goes to study his subjects because he was a prepared a master degree in international taxation at that time to have come CFO in his company. Furthermore, he gets for this promotion due to his work and his activity. I would mention proverb in my country, that said, "likewise nuts need that dirt environment to grow, doing more things are vital for growing and becoming valuable person"; consequently, people need to do more a lot of things to become a successful person.
To drow a conclusion, taking what I mentioned above, I strongly believe that doing many things contribute to widening horizon, which will influence profoundly on individual and then on society because doing a lot of things are a great teacher to build character.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, as to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81590909091 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72188767598 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515909090909 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.13392171 48.9658058833 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.722222222 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4444444444 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264421672741 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073417599866 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684447909128 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168153002168 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532846527059 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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