Everyone with regard to his/ her viewpoint may maintain different direction toward this statement. Many people may see doing sport just as an entertainment to fill their leisure time while others have the conviction that sport is something more than entertainment and play an important role in their lives. I am unanimous with the latter group for two reasons which I vastly explore in the following essay.
To begin with, doing sport has taught me, almost everything in the world outside, appear to us based on our interpretation and the way we look at our surrounding. Which means the same events may seem totally different to one another. We based on our taught and private viewpoint shape our world and in order to change the world outside we should first begin from the world inside. For instance, I have had aqua phobia for over 15 years so much that I could not even swim in shallow water. I have had tried many times but failed until I begin to overcome my fear by changing my mind about water thinking that it really does not intend to kill me but it is so beautiful and magic. I practice almost every day for 2 hours. After 2 years from that time now not only do I swim professionally but I also work as a lifeguard at a swimming pool. So swimming makes me aware of the importance of my taught, ideas and beliefs which directly influence my life quality.
Secondly, some sports such as yoga can directly affect our mentally alert and healthy state. In psychological point of view our brains fall into unconscious state in which we can rewrite some firm beliefs and convert to a new type by doing such activities more and more. As an example my aunt had always been suffering from negativity in almost every aspect of her life; about weather, her children, named but a few. But by taking yoga after almost two years she has become almost positive type so much that in hardships through her life she is brisket and strong.
To make a long story short, I thing sports teach us several points in our lives. And in some cases they can change our ideas or beliefs. As I mentioned above swimming build my confidence in many aspect of life and yoga change my aunt in a way that she sees the world in a better way than before.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, such as, in some cases, to begin with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51477832512 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43098956342 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544334975369 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5582655021 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.833333333 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160651835944 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445352035735 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408068867138 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10300617523 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572949495117 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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