Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) shouldn’t be allowed.
Since the beginning of this century, in all distinctive civilized societies, it has been a very controversial argument among individuals or even intellectuals, through which numerous conflicts has engendered. Some people are Inclined toward the opinion that TV advertising targeting toddlers should not be allowed, while others consider this issue in a whole diverse perspective. Although an absolute conclusion cannot be made, in spite of all opposite attitudes, I strongly concur with the idea that the TV advertising for young children shouldn't be permitted. The outstanding of my reasons would be explored below.
To begin with, certainly, the personality of the young children would not have been constructed completely, and the age up to five is a very important age for the personality construction. I believe I read this fact in a psychology magazine that it is believed that most of our personality begins to create by the age of five, so parents should be careful on that time. Most of them not only always watch their language in front of their babies but also don't turn on the TV whenever their children are around. I remember my mother never let me watch TV until I was eight.
In addition to the alternation in the personality, these advertisements might be inappropriate for children. It is obvious that TV provides a lot of useful programs such as documentaries; however, there are always some shows that are inappropriate. The advertisements are no exception. Some of them may be inappropriate either sexually or psychologically. This is a fact that children don't comprehend all the things they see, so may be these advertisements not only affect them in a wrong way but also hurt them. For example, there is an advertisement about a dollhouse, which in a man was creating the dollhouse by hammering some nails. As a matter of fact, my niece had been watching that advertisement, and she had been wanted to try it on her own. She ended up hurting her fingers so bad.
Apart from the points I made above there is also another reason that I would like to discuss about and it's that these advertisements could cause conflicts between parents and their children. For example, a TV advertisement is about a toy that some parents cannot afford to buy it such as a tiny car; however, a child can't understand the financial situation of his or her parents, so he or she may persist in buying the car. If the parents didn't buy it this kid probably would never forget it, consequently, it would affect his or her relationship with his or her parents in the future.
By way of conclusion, based on the argument explored above I fundamentally agree with the statement that TV advertisements shouldn't target the infants and toddlers, and it has to be prevented. Although they may have some benefits for adults but definitely they aren’t beneficial for the children.
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Discourse Markers used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.198130841121 0.229887763892 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.160747663551 0.158761421928 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0560747663551 0.0866891130778 65% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0654205607477 0.046263068375 141% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0859813084112 0.0685040099705 126% => OK
Prepositions: 0.138317757009 0.118717715034 117% => OK
Participles: 0.0392523364486 0.0351676179071 112% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.09122602456 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.014953271028 0.0309702414327 48% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.11214953271 0.0887237588012 126% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0280373831776 0.0209618222197 134% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00934579439252 0.0139019557991 67% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2880.0 2387.08602151 121% => OK
No of words: 486.0 408.028673835 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.92592592593 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.316872427984 0.338922669872 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.253086419753 0.251872472559 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.20987654321 0.174417080927 120% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127572016461 0.112833075102 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09122602456 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493827160494 0.524397521467 94% => OK
Word variations: 57.2761270165 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.1428571429 20.5533526081 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.76390217 48.84282405 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.142857143 120.699889404 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.5533526081 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.761904761905 0.644075263715 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 48.4514991182 45.7405998639 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.20359281437 1.45489161554 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202165383558 0.300154397459 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10017059472 0.103427244359 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0824150682325 0.0752933317313 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.475316628314 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153541692958 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737406432781 0.114077575197 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056483434143 0.0781384742642 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.328468895031 0.336927656856 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0534097346167 0.067059652881 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140372577018 0.210909579961 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324591083375 0.0618886996521 52% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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